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It was about the news from European Union which they will ban internal combustion engine cars from 2035. It means that you are able to buy only electric car. But in fact, you can not forcast whether it is possble to change from combustion engine to elctric car, because there are a huge kinds of challenges and obstacles. Especially, rare material and energy industry structure are the most un solvable problem. That is, humanbeings avarice stop the progress.

As you know electric car is not a best choice for environmental protection. Electric car also generates CO2 as well. When you produce electricity, you use a huge amount of fossil fuel and the process you build cars. Except that, during the distribution process you generates CO2 and other emission too.

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Thank you for doing your homework. :)

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Here are my corrections for you:


It was about the news from European Union which they will ban internal combustion engine cars from 2035. 

>> The news was about European Union's plan to ban internal combustion engine cars from 2035. 

It means that you are able to buy only electric car. 

>> It means that you are able to buy only electric cars. 

But in fact, you can not forcast whether it is possble to change from combustion engine to elctric car, because there are a huge kinds of challenges and obstacles.

>> But the matter of fact is you can not forecast whether it is possible to change from combustion engines to electric cars, because there are huge kinds of challenges and obstacles.

Especially, rare material and energy industry structure are the most un solvable problem. 

>> Especially because rare materials and energy industry structures are the most unsolvable problem. 

That is, humanbeings avarice stop the progress.
>> Human beings advance stops the progress.


As you know electric car is not a best choice for environmental protection. 

>> As you know, an electric car is not the best choice for environmental protection. 

Electric car also generates CO2 as well. 

>> An electric car also generates CO2.


When you produce electricity, you use a huge amount of fossil fuel and the process you build cars. 

>> When you produce electricity, you use a huge amount of fossil fuel in the process of building cars. 

Except that, during the distribution process you generates CO2 and other emission too.

>> Other than that, during the distribution process, you generate CO2 and other emissions too.



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