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How important are you to your family?

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Family is most important thing to me. I think I'm very lucky person. it is because I have perfect my whole family.
They always will be my side. That give me a confidence to live the life. I feel security. And also I like my parents hometown.
It's not Seoul. There is countryside nearby the sea.
They have lived in hometown since they were kid.
And they give us special hometown and even vacation house.
After I became a adult, I think about my future family seriously.
I decide, I will make a family like my parents.
I think my goal in my life is perfect happiness.
Family can make my goal.

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Hello Eun Chae!
Thanks for sharing about your family.  You have good simple sentences, but check the corrections and be familiar with the use of articles and the right words for your sentences. ^^


~T. Maine 


Family is most important thing to me. 
>>My family is the most important people to me. 
I think I'm very lucky person. it is because I have perfect my whole family.
>>I think I'm a very lucky person because I have a completely perfect family. 
They always will be my side. 
>>They always will be at my side. 
That give me a confidence to live the life. 
>> That gives me the confidence to live my life. 
I feel security. And also I like my parents hometown.
>> I feel secure and I also like my parents' hometown.
It's not Seoul. 
>> Correct. 
There is countryside nearby the sea.
>> That is the countryside nearby the sea. 
They have lived in hometown since they were kid.
>> They have lived in their hometown since they were kids.
And they give us special hometown and even vacation house.
>>And they give us a special hometown and even a vacation house. 
After I became a adult, I think about my future family seriously.
>>After I became an adult, I think about my future family seriously. 
I decide, I will make a family like my parents.
>> I decide to make a family and be like my parents. 
I think my goal in my life is perfect happiness.
>>Correct. 
Family can make my goal.
>>Correct. 

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