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Having a baby is blessing.
Someone get easily have baby but someone cannot.
Here is my story .
I get married when I was 36 years old.
I had worked so hard that times, therefore I did not have time to consider about having a baby.
When I was 40 years old, I and my husband decided to have a baby.
We went to OBGY clinic and I heard a sad story.
The doctor said that I was born having a just one ovary.(Female has two ovays)
And moreover, the ovary was too weak to carry a baby. (I could miscarry a baby)
I and my husband thought over and over that night.
The next day, my husband asked me if we adopt a pretty dog instead of having a baby.
I asked him that we could try other ways to have a baby because I thought that we may regret this decision someday.
He said that he does not want to see me suffering from trial to have a baby.
I said 'Yes' and we went to a pet shop right away and bought lovely Nana.

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Hi there Ms. Eunice! ^^ Thanks for your story. ^^ Actually, I'm now 35 and the people around me are so worried about me having no baby yet. They said that it's too difficult to have a baby in my age. I want to but my husband is not with me, so I tell the people " How can I make a baby on my own?" Hahaha!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA 
Having a baby is blessing.
>>> CORRECT
Someone get easily have baby but someone cannot.
>>> Some people can easily have babies but some don't. 
Here is my story.
>>> CORRECT
I get married when I was 36 years old.
>>> I got married when I was 36 years old.
I had worked so hard that times, therefore I did not have time to consider about having a baby.
>>>I had worked so hard that time, therefore I did not consider having a baby.
When I was 40 years old, I and my husband decided to have a baby.
>>> CORRECT
We went to OBGY clinic and I heard a sad story.
>>> CORRECT
The doctor said that I was born having just one ovary.(Female has two ovaries).
>>> CORRECT
And moreover, the ovary was too weak to carry a baby. (I could miscarry a baby)
>>> CORRECT
I and my husband thought over and over that night.
>>> CORRECT
The next day, my husband asked me if we adopt a pretty dog instead of having a baby.
>>> CORRECT
I asked him that we could try other ways to have a baby because I thought that we may regret this decision someday.
>>> CORRECT
He said that he does not want to see me suffering from trials to have a baby.
>>> CORRECT
I said 'Yes' and we went to a pet shop right away and bought lovely Nana.
>>> CORRECT
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