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I think it's a good way to put many people on the map. Actually, our country is so small and many people know only related to North Korea. So, this is a big apportunity to know our culture. And we can get the money through tourists who come to Korea to watch sports game. Because they stay some accommodations such as hotel, Airbnb. Also,they would buy some items, eat something! Then,our seller get more money than usual. But, one thing that we must be careful is not to give the negative impressions. We have to welcome to people from other countries and do in a good manners.

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Happy Mondy Hui Woon! Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts about this topic. I really appreciate it. ^_^
T. Irene
I think it's a good way to put many people on the map. 
>>> Correct.
OR
>>> I think it's a good way to get to know other countries on the map. 
Actually, our country is so small and many people know only related to North Korea. 
>>>  Actually, our country is so small and many people know us only in relation to North Korea. 
So, this is a big opportunity to know our culture. 
>>> So, this is a big opportunity to let other nations know about our culture. 
And we can get the money through tourists who come to Korea to watch sports game. 
>>> We  also can earn money through tourists who come to Korea to watch sports games. 
Because they stay some accommodations such as hotel, Airbnb. 
>>> Some of them stay in accommodations such as hotels, and Airbnb. 
Also,they would buy some items, eat something! 
>>>  They would buy some items or eat something Korean! 
Then,our seller get more money than usual. 
>>> Then our businesses will earn more money. 
But, one thing that we must be careful is not to give the negative impressions. 
>>> However then,  one thing that we must be careful of is not to give negative impressions. 
We have to welcome to people from other countries and do in a good manners.
>>> We have to be hospitable to people from other countries and just show good manners.








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