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How do you balance your work and personal life

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i think work and life balance is very important these days. you know many company makes many program for keep workers balance too.
how important is it!
anyway i keep my life balance with beer. you know when i come back home after work. we need some fresh beer right? it makes me feel comfortable. i mean happy. with just one drink! it is so affordable
my favorite beer is cass which is made in korea. and i love to drink beer with potato chips.
so.. its funny but i keep my life balance with beer and chips and also youtube.

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Hello Robin!
I see that you also enjoy having some beer after work.  It is not easy to work with kids so I definitely understand your activity. But try using these correct sentences as well.  Good luck! ^^


~T. Maine

i think work and life balance is very important these days. 
>>I think work and life balance is very important these days. 

you know many company makes many program for keep workers balance too.
>>You know many companies make programs to keep workers in balance too. 

how important is it!
>>How important is it?

anyway i keep my life balance with beer. 
>>Anyway, I keep my work-life balance with beer. 

you know when i come back home after work. we need some fresh beer right?
>>You know when I come back home after work, I need some fresh beer. 

 it makes me feel comfortable. 
>>It makes me feel comfortable. 

i mean happy. with just one drink!
>> I mean I feel happy with just one drink.

 it is so affordable
my favorite beer is cass which is made in korea.
>> It is so affordable to buy my favorite beer made in Korea which is Cass.

 and i love to drink beer with potato chips.
>>And I love to drink beer with potato chips. 

so.. its funny but i keep my life balance with beer and chips and also youtube.
>>So, it's funny but I keep my work-life balance with the beer, chips, and YouTube. 


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