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An answer to the topic \"Why do some people save money and some people don\'t?\" ^_^

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Some people don't save money because for the children's side, they do chores and save money for (for example) Pokemon cards & sweets. But for the adult's side, they don't save money. Adults have to buy their chidren clothes, food, and stuff! But sure, the may be some children who don't save money like me and some adults who save money. As the result, saving money or not denpends on your choice!

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Hello Heather! I appreciate that you find time to do your homework. Keep practicing in order to enhance your writing skills. ~T. Lyn
Some people don't save money because for the children's side, they do chores and save money for (for example) Pokemon cards & sweets. 
>>Some people can't save money because they need to use it for their children such as giving them money as a reward when they do the chores or buying them some Pokemon cards and anything sweets.
But for the adult's side, they don't save money.
>>On the adult's side, it is hard to save money.
Adults have to buy their chidren clothes, food, and stuff! 
>>They have to buy children's clothes, food, and stuff.
But sure, the may be some children who don't save money like me and some adults who save money.
>>There are children like me who don't save money and there are adults who do.
As the result, saving money or not denpends on your choice!
>>As a result, whether you save money is up to you!
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