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How do you feel about working with other people? What are the advantages of working with others?

first of all.. i am a extrovert person. so i love to work with others. but you know someone who has introvert mind. sometimes make me tired. so i love to work with extrovert people. and i think the advantages of working with others are...first we can make many creative ideas and also we can keep good relationship. And it makes us more creative. you know it is important that making new ideas makes more high result. so i love to work with others and make more ideas

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Hello Robin!
You already got a good idea to answer this question, but try to follow the correct pattern on how to make better sentences in English.  Ask questions about grammar in case you feel confused about the rules.  ^^


~T. Maine

first of all.. i am a extrovert person. so i love to work with others. 
>>First of all, I am an extrovert so I love to work with others. 
but you know someone who has introvert mind. sometimes make me tired.
>>But you know someone who has an introverted mind sometimes makes me feel tired. 
 so i love to work with extrovert people. 
>> So I live to work with people similar with me. 
and i think the advantages of working with others are...
>>And I think the advantages of working with others are the following. 
first we can make many creative ideas and also we can keep good relationship. 
>>First, we can make many creative ideas and also can keep a good working relationship. 
And it makes us more creative. 
>>And it also makes us more creative.  
you know it is important that making new ideas makes more high result. 
>>It is important to make new ideas to make better results. 
so i love to work with others and make more ideas
>> So I love working with others and making more ideas. 
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