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My first diary

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2022-07-21 2322

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Today our school started of summer vacation. So excited!!
I don¡¯t have summer vacation plan, now but l¡¯ll plan it.
I ate hamberger in lunch. It is new menu in mom¡¯s touch (korean hamberger restaurant).
It was very delicious. But a little bit spicy.
Tomorrow l¡¯m going to watch disney movie. I¡¯ll set language and subtitle in english.
I think it is very hard for me. But it¡¯s ok. Cause I¡¯m learning english

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Hello Yu Jin!
Great job on writing your first diary.   Check the corrections and memorize the right ones.  Reading English books and articles is very helpful for your vocabulary and grammar. ^^


~T. Maine

Today our school started of summer vacation. So excited!!
>>Today, our school started the summer vacation so I am so excited. 
I don¡¯t have summer vacation plan, now but l¡¯ll plan it.
>>I don't have any summer vacation plan now, but I'll plan it soon. 
I ate hamberger in lunch. 
>>I ate a hamburger for lunch today. 
It is new menu in mom¡¯s touch (korean hamberger restaurant).
>>It is a new menu in Mom's touch which is a Korean hamburger restaurant. 
It was very delicious. But a little bit spicy.
>>It was very delicious but a little bit spicy. 
Tomorrow l¡¯m going to watch disney movie. 
>>Tomorrow I'm going to watch a Disney movie. 
I¡¯ll set language and subtitle in english.
>>I'll set the language and subtitle to English. 
I think it is very hard for me. 
>> I think it is very hard for me. 
But it¡¯s ok. Cause I¡¯m learning english
>>  But it is okay because I will be able to learn English on my own.  ^^

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