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Q:Which part of a song do you think is more important: the lyrics or the melody?
A:I think both of them are as important as each other.
Even if the lyrics are good, if the melody is not good, then people wont hear the song.
Also, even if the melody is good, if the lyrics are not good, then people will hear the song only one or two times.
So, a singer or a producer should be careful when they are choosing the words or they're making melodies.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think both of them are as important as each other.

>> CORRECT!
Even if the lyrics are good, if the melody is not good, then people wont hear the song.

>> Even if the lyrics are good, if the melody is not good, then people won't listen to the song.
Also, even if the melody is good, if the lyrics are not good, then people will hear the song only one or two times.

>> Also, even if the melody is good, if the lyrics are not good, then people will listen to the song only once or twice.
So, a singer or a producer should be careful when they are choosing the words or they're making melodies.

>> So a singer or a producer should be careful when they are choosing the words or when they're making the melody.

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