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Section 6

You can see that the Contracts and spot have a lot of pairs.

And Earn section is like DeFi service. Staking, Dual asset, mining pool, Launchpool. Almost DeFi service is good strategy in bear market.
And NFT section is like opensea. We service Ethereum and XTZ Chain. I think we service XTZ chain is speciality strategy.

Section 7
These three are recently released products. So we will push these three products. And I hope reach 3Q OKR.

Section 8
Department part I will introduce Korea region Team.

Section 9
KR team need to improve these things.

Section 10
My team Focus on Retail Client. Retail client dividrf into 5section. Content, Direct & Organic, SEO, Paid & Paid App, PR Branding
Section 11
So we proceed like this. Create Korea Region Campaign, Publish article on Media, Google Key words advertisements and Naver view section top exposure. Exposure Campaign & Product on KOL. Third parties Display advertisements. Through SNS & social media proceed Viral marketing.

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Hi there Seong! ^^ Thanks for letting me correct your presentation! Good luck!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Section 6
You can see that the Contracts and spot have a lot of pairs.
>>> CORRECT
And Earn section is like DeFi service. Staking, Dual asset, mining pool, Launchpool. 
>>> And Earn section is similar with DeFi service it does 
Staking, Dual asset, mining pool and Launchpool. 
Almost DeFi service is good strategy in bear market.
>>>In most situation DeFi service has better strategy in bear market.
And NFT section is like opensea. 
>>> CORRECT
We service Ethereum and XTZ Chain. 
>>> We (give) service to Ethereum and XTZ Chain. 
I think we service XTZ chain is speciality strategy.
>>>
 We actually give service to XTZ chain with special strategy.
Section 7
These three are recently released products. 
>>> CORRECT
So we will push these three products. And I hope reach 3Q OKR.
>>> 
So we will push these three products and I hope it will reach 3Q OKR.
Section 8
Department part I will introduce Korea region Team.
>>> The 
Department part will be introduced by the Korea Region Team.
Section 9
KR team needs to improve these things.
>>> CORRECT
Section 10
My team Focus on Retail Client. 
>>> CORRECT
Retail client dividrf into 5section.  Content, Direct & Organic, SEO, Paid & Paid App, PR Branding
>>> The Retail client is divided into 5 sections. They are
 Content, Direct & Organic, SEO, Paid & Paid App and PR Branding.
Section 11
So we proceed like this. Create Korea Region Campaign, Publish article on Media, Google Key words advertisements and Naver view section top exposure. 
>>> So it goes like this. We Create Korea Region Campaign, Publish article on Media, Google Key words advertisements and Naver view section top exposure. 
Exposure Campaign & Product on KOL. 
>>> CORRECT
Third parties Display advertisements. Through SNS & social media proceed Viral marketing.
>>> 
Third parties Display advertisements through SNS & social media which proceeds Viral marketing.
Thanks!
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