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It's definitely giving up math. Before I makes that decision, I couldn't be sure what I should do and what's my dream. But I talked with my sister, who did her entrance exam already, and she suggested You're not good at math actually, why don't you study other subjects instead of studying math? In art university, they don't see your math grade.

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Hello Rachel!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


It's definitely giving up math. 

>> CORRECT!


Before I makes that decision, I couldn't be sure what I should do and what's my dream. 

>> Before I made that decision, I wasn't sure what I should do and what's my dream. 

But I talked with my sister, who did her entrance exam already, and she suggested You're not good at math actually, why don't you study other subjects instead of studying math? 

>> I talked with my sister who did her entrance exam already and she said I'm not good in math actually, so she suggested That I study other subjects instead of studying math.

In art university, they don't see your math grade.

>> In art university, they don't look at your math grades.

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