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ESSAY: There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

There are traffice noise, neighbor's noise and animal's noise.
I want to tell you about noise form neighbors.
There have been noise problems a lot since people started living in apartments.
I hear tragic news oftenly about that he/she killed his/her neighbors becasue of the noise from upstairs.
Although goverment force consruction company to use noiseproof between floors, it cannot be a perfact solution.
Most of korean who are living in apartment, they try not to make noise with this way. wearing slippers, walking like a cat, cover floor with mattress.
I think, to solve noise problem, Let's imagine that our neighbors are our loving children and family.
When you do that , you will not make noise not to disturbe your sleeping love ones.

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Good morning Ms. Eunice! ^^ It's a beautiful day today! Enjoy every moment with your lovely husband! ;) The world is getting noisier every day. Last night, there were some of my neighbors who were drinking alcohol, laughing out loud, screaming and disturbing other people. They were finished at around 2am. I wasn't able to sleep well because I could clearly hear them. Anyway, thanks for another set of answer! Keep it up!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
There are traffice noise, neighbor's noise and animal's noise.
>>> There are noise from traffic jam, neighbor's noise and noise in the middle of the night.
I want to tell you about noise form neighbors.
>>> I want to tell you about the noise from neighbors.
There have been noise problems a lot since people started living in apartments.
>>> There have been  a lot of noise problems since people started living in apartments.
I hear tragic news oftenly about that he/she killed his/her neighbors becasue of the noise from upstairs.
>>> often hear tragic news  about killing neighbors because of the noise from the next floor.
Although goverment force consruction company to use noiseproof between floors, it cannot be a perfact solution.
>>> Although the government forced consruction companies to use noise proof between floors, it cannot be a prefect solution.
Most of korean who are living in apartment, they try not to make noise with this way. wearing slippers, walking like a cat, cover floor with mattress.
>>> Most Koreans who are living in apartment try not to make a noise by wearing slippers, walking like a cat, and covering the floor with mattress.
I think, to solve noise problem, Let's imagine that our neighbors are our loving children and family.
>>> I think, to solve noise problem, we have to imagine that our neighbors are our loving children and family.
When you do that , you will not make noise not to disturbe your sleeping love ones
>>> When we do that, we will not make a noise to disturb our sleeping loved ones.
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