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What do you think is the most dangerous animal?

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I think the most dangerous animal is dog. These days, many people have dogs. some dogs are cute, but there are so many wild dogs. The wild dogs need to be careful. When they go out, they should need leashes and muzzles. I saw the terrible news on TV. A wild dog attacted a boy. The boy got wound lots of his body. It happened because of careless of the dog owner. I haven't heard that people get attacted from other animals for years.

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Good day, Sir Hwanny!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

I think the most dangerous animal is dog. 
>> I think the most dangerous animal is a dog. 
These days, many people have dogs. 
>> CORRECT!
some dogs are cute, but there are so many wild dogs. 
>>  Some dogs are cute, but there are so many wild dogs. 
The wild dogs need to be careful. 
>> We need to be careful of wild dogs.
When they go out, they should need leashes and muzzles. 
>> CORRECT!
I saw the terrible news on TV. 
>> CORRECT!
A wild dog attacted a boy. 
>> A wild dog attacked a boy.
The boy got wound lots of his body. 
>> The boy got a lot of wounds on his body. 
It happened because of careless of the dog owner. 
>> It happened because of the careless dog owner. 
OR >> It happened because of the owner's carelessness.
I haven't heard that people get attacted from other animals for years.
>> I haven't heard that people get attacked by  other animals for years.

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