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Why I don\'t want to try raising animals.

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I don't want to try raising animals.
Because when we raise animals, our room will be dirty.
Second, when we raise animals, we should clean their excreta.
Third, we should have permission for my parents.
Lastly, we should use a lot of money for them.

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Good day, Joey!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

I don't want to try raising animals.
>> CORRECT!
Because when we raise animals, our room will be dirty.
>> That's because when we raise animals, our room will be dirty.
Second, when we raise animals, we should clean their excreta.
>> CORRECT!
Third, we should have permission for my parents.
>> Third, we should ask permission from my parents.
Lastly, we should use a lot of money for them.
>> CORRECT!
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