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hello caitryn. i did my homework.

definitely i like it. i went travel five countries with my mom. it¡¯s a shame that my dad don¡¯t like trip. my mom and i went travel in Guam, Indonesia, Laos, Turkey and Singapore. of course, we like Korea local trip too. most elderly can¡¯t enjoy trip than young people because lots of cities is develop of technology rapidly while, old people¡¯s brain and physical function become down grade. it is difficult that absoub young people¡¯s new culture to elders so i think that she needs my helping. anyway, i love see that she says ¡°wow, amazing¡± and ¡°so surprize¡± something like that during enjoying trip. also she loves ride a attraction such as roller-coster and zyro-drop. even she is 61 years old. but we enjoy travel as safety as possible. in addition, i usually visit to local market with my mother. it is not common things by most korean men. when we went market, maybe she felt that jeal of a many number of old women and she enjoy it. i think.

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Hi, Yeong Ho!
Thank you for doing your homework. I really admire how close you are to your mom and that you get to do a lot of things with her. Please take note of the different corrections below and also some vocabulary words that I added.
-T. Caitlyn
definitely i like it. 
>> I definitely like it.
i went travel five countries with my mom. 
>> I traveled to five countries with my mom.
it¡¯s a shame that my dad don¡¯t like trip. 
>> It's a shame that my dad doesn't like going on trips.
my mom and i went travel in Guam, Indonesia, Laos, Turkey and Singapore. 
>> My mom and I went to Guam, Indonesia, Laos, Turkey, and Singapore.
of course, we like Korea local trip too.
 >> Of course, we like local trips, too.
most elderly can¡¯t enjoy trip than young people because lots of cities is develop of technology rapidly while, old people¡¯s brain and physical function become down grade. 
>> Most elderly don't enjoy traveling unlike young people because lots of cities' technology are developing rapidly while old people's mental and physical condition are degenerating.
it is difficult that absoub young people¡¯s new culture to elders so i think that she needs my helping. 
>> It's difficult for elders to adapt to the younger generation's culture so I think my mom needs my help.
anyway, i love see that she says ¡°wow, amazing¡± and ¡°so surprize¡± something like that during enjoying trip. 
>> I love hearing her say " Wow", " Amazing" and "Surprising" while enjoying our trips.
also she loves ride a attraction such as roller-coster and zyro-drop. even she is 61 years old.
>> She also loves amusement park rides like roller coasters and gyro drops even if she is 61 years old.
 but we enjoy travel as safety as possible. 
>> We always make sure to travel safely.
in addition, i usually visit to local market with my mother.
>> In addition, I usually visit the local market with my mother.
 it is not common things by most korean men. 
>> It is not common for Korean men.
when we went market, maybe she felt that jeal of a many number of old women and she enjoy it.  i think.
>> When we went to the market, I think she felt great and enjoys being around other old women.
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