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The more immunity you have, the less diseases you will get. Making the good immune system is the best way to avoid getting sick. I choose to sleep at least 6 to 7 hours and have vitamin supplements aside from meals.

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Hello, Judy! Good evening.

You are absolutely right. Boosting the immune system such as taking vaccines as well as having a healthy diet and enough sleep truly help us dtrong and fit. Hence, do all that you can to achieve these.

Thank you for this homework answer! You have done really well. I have some suggestions for you to check out. Read carefully and analyze them.

See you next week!

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The more immunity you have, the less diseases you will get. 
>> Correct!

Making the good immune system is the best way to avoid getting sick. 
>> Having a good immune system is the best way to avoid getting sick. 

I choose to sleep at least 6 to 7 hours and have vitamin supplements aside from meals.
>>  Correct!
Or: I choose to sleep for at least 6 to 7 hours and have vitamins or supplements aside from meals.
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