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ESSAY: Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

On the other hand, these days, weddings are going smaller in Korea.
They just invite relatives and close firends in their weddings.
Becasue they don't want to waste money for wedding ceremony which takes for an hour.
But they go to honeymoon to the expensive and luxurious place or they rent a bigger house with the saved money from the weddings.
I am sure that the parents who has only child want to have a big wedding because it will be first and last wedding in their family.
I think it does not matter whether the wedding is big and expensive as long as you can deal with it.

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Hi again Ms. Eunice! You may be wondering about the essay question. We were talking about our love stories so I thought of asking you a question about weddings. Hahaha! Anyway, I always appreciate your intelligence! ^^ By the way, I heard that you guys can hire people to attend in weddings so as to make a good crowd. Is it true? I think I need that kind of job. Hahaha
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
On the other hand, these days, weddings are going smaller in Korea.
>>> CORRECT
They just invite relatives and close friends in their weddings.
>>> CORRECT
Becasue they don't want to waste money for wedding ceremony which takes for an hour.
>>> Because they don't want to waste money for the wedding ceremony which only takes for an hour.
But they go to honeymoon to the expensive and luxurious place or they rent a bigger house with the saved money from the weddings.
>>> But they go to honeymoon to expensive and luxurious place or they rent a bigger house using the saved money from the weddings.
I am sure that the parents who has only child want to have a big wedding because it will be first and last wedding in their family.
>>> I am sure that parents who have an only child want to have a big wedding because it will be the first and the last wedding in their family.
I think it does not matter whether the wedding is big and expensive as long as you can deal with it.
>>> CORRECT
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