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What are some things people can do to keep healthy?

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Keeping healthy is point on regularity. I think, regular life can be healthy. We all have our body pattern. Usually people has breakfast at regular time. And lunch, dinner is also.
And they go to sleep a fixed time and wake up too. This fixed life can make your body pattern time. It can avoid accident situation. Like midnight meals or overeat.
And exercise is also important.it is too hard for me. I don't have any energy to exercise after work. But I try to simply stretching after bath.it feels refreshed and cool. I think I lack of exercise. If I exercise, I will have a little power and muscles and I will have more energy better than now.
I will start exercise step by step.it is most difficult to start something. But I can do it. I will have a hot body ~

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Hello Eun Chae!
Read the corrections given.  Remember to follow the pattern in English and use simple sentences to avoid misunderstanding between the reader and the listener.  Keep on practicing! ^^


~T. Maine

Keeping healthy is point on regularity. 
>> People should keep their bodies healthy regularly. 
I think, regular life can be healthy. 
>>I think it is healthy if exercise and diet are done regularly. 
We all have our body pattern. 
>>We all have our body patterns. 
Usually people has breakfast at regular time. And lunch, dinner is also.
>>Usually, people have breakfast, lunch, and dinner at a regular time. 
And they go to sleep a fixed time and wake up too. 
>>And they go to sleep and wake up at fixed times. 
This fixed life can make your body pattern time. 
>>This life can make your body pattern every day. 
It can avoid accident situation. Like midnight meals or overeat.
>>It can avoid unexpected overeating at night. 
And exercise is also important.it is too hard for me. 
>> Exercise is also important, but it is hard for me. 
I don't have any energy to exercise after work. 
>>Correct. 
But I try to simply stretching after bath.
>>But I try to simply stretch after bathing. 
it feels refreshed and cool. 
>> It makes me feel refreshed and cool. 
I think I lack of exercise.
>>I think I lack exercise. 
If I exercise, I will have a little power and muscles and I will have more energy better than now.
>>If I exercise, I will have less energy and more muscles.  I want to be more energetic. 
I will start exercise step by step.it is most difficult to start something. 
>>I will start exercising step-by-step.  It is more difficult to start something which in not in my routine. 
But I can do it. I will have a hot body ~
>>Correct. 

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