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What is something you hate doing when you get home?

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At home, I do many things. There can be something that I hate doing. Also, there can be something that I want to do Today, I will write about what I hate doing at home.

First, I hate doing my homework. I know that I should do my homework, but I don¡¯t want to do my homework. Maybe every children agrees with me. Doing homework at home is very hard working. When we get home from academies we get tried and we want to take a rest. But when we get home, my homework is waiting for me. So I don¡¯t want to do my homework at home.

Next, I hate to put things away. When I get home my house always is messy. Because my brother goes to school leaving things untidy. When I find my house messy after getting back home, I get stressed. Putting things away is very hard working and asks me patience and sacrifice. So I also hate putting things away at home.

In the house, there are lots of things that make me happy and sick at the same time. However, I love my place, my house.

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Hi, Rana! 

Thank you for sharing about this one and for taking time to answer. 
Have a great evening and see you soon! :)

~T. Roanne ^_^
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At home, I do many things. 
>> Correct! 
There can be something that I hate doing. 
>> Correct! 
Also, there can be something that I want to do Today, I will write about what I hate doing at home.
>> Correct! 

First, I hate doing my homework. 
>> Correct! 
I know that I should do my homework, but I don¡¯t want to do my homework. 
>> Correct! 
Maybe every children agrees with me. 
>> Correct! 
Doing homework at home is very hard working. 
>> Correct! 
When we get home from academies we get tried and we want to take a rest. 
>> When we get home from academies we get tired and we want to take a rest.  
But when we get home, my homework is waiting for me. 
>> Correct! 
So I don¡¯t want to do my homework at home.
>> Correct! 

Next, I hate to put things away. 
>> Correct! 
When I get home my house always is messy. 
>> Correct! 
Because my brother goes to school leaving things untidy. 
>> Correct! 
When I find my house messy after getting back home, I get stressed. 
>> Correct! 
Putting things away is very hard working and asks me patience and sacrifice. 
>> Correct! 
So I also hate putting things away at home.
>> Correct! 

In the house, there are lots of things that make me happy and sick at the same time.
>> Correct! 
However, I love my place, my house.
>> Correct! 


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