¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

gadgets

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ¼­*ȯ
2022-07-13 763

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

umm let me think about it...i am prefer comfortable one than new one. its because you know, science technology is changed very fast now days. so.. honestly i cant trace the science technology advance. i know sometimes new gadgets is more comfortable than old one. but it is usually makes me hard to adapt and makes me headache

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello Robin!
It is really important to check your grammar in English.  Reading more English articles could be helpful as you read, understand, and be familiar with the patterns.  Try also to make your sentences with the right pattern.  ^^

~T. Maine

umm let me think about it...i am prefer comfortable one than new one. 
>>I prefer a comfortable one to the new one. 
its because you know, science technology is changed very fast now days. 
>>It's because you know, science and technology are changing very fast these days. 
so.. honestly i cant trace the science technology advance. 
>>So honestly, I can't trace science and technology's advancement. 
i know sometimes new gadgets is more comfortable than old one. 
>> I know sometimes new gadgets are more comfortable than the old ones. 
but it is usually makes me hard to adapt and makes me headache
>>But it usually makes me hard to adapt and makes me have a headache. 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
117391 Do you prefer relaxing weekends doing nothing or active ones? ¼­*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 0
117390 What is a way to solve your country\'s fast-aging population? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 2
117389 Do you watch TV or do you prefer to stream from the internet? ±è*ÀÎ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 669
117388 Fill in the blanks using the correct idiom to complete the... Àå*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 372
117387 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 0
117386 Homework ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 0
117385 Homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 2
117384 HOMEWORK ¹è*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 368
117383 How do you see yourself 10 years from now? Ȳ*º° ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 303
117382 HOMEWORK ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 2
117381 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 349
117380 My hometown foods. ÀÌ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 543
117379 What is your dream home? What home improvements would you like... ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 230
117378 Favorite Restaurant ÀÌ*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 588
117377 Tell me about the time you went above and beyond ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 235
117376 Give me one big mistake that you have done and what lesson have... ¿©*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 0
117375 What if I don\'t have a mobile phone? ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 500
117374 homework ÀÌ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 348
117373 Homework Á¤*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 318
117372 Homework ¹æ*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-15 403

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04