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umm let me think about it...i am prefer comfortable one than new one. its because you know, science technology is changed very fast now days. so.. honestly i cant trace the science technology advance. i know sometimes new gadgets is more comfortable than old one. but it is usually makes me hard to adapt and makes me headache

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Hello Robin!
It is really important to check your grammar in English.  Reading more English articles could be helpful as you read, understand, and be familiar with the patterns.  Try also to make your sentences with the right pattern.  ^^

~T. Maine

umm let me think about it...i am prefer comfortable one than new one. 
>>I prefer a comfortable one to the new one. 
its because you know, science technology is changed very fast now days. 
>>It's because you know, science and technology are changing very fast these days. 
so.. honestly i cant trace the science technology advance. 
>>So honestly, I can't trace science and technology's advancement. 
i know sometimes new gadgets is more comfortable than old one. 
>> I know sometimes new gadgets are more comfortable than the old ones. 
but it is usually makes me hard to adapt and makes me headache
>>But it usually makes me hard to adapt and makes me have a headache. 
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