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What is your opinion about people with tattoos? Explain your answer.

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In my opinion, we can feel free about doing tattoos.
Because we don't say that you can't decorate yourself.
It is same too.
Doing tattoos is one of decorations that people do.
Because of this reason, I think we can feel free about doing tattoos nowadays.
But actually, I don't like tattoos.

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Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my opinion, we can feel free about doing tattoos.
>> In my opinion, we should have the freedom to have tattoos. 

Because we don't say that you can't decorate yourself.
>> It is because no one usually say that we can decorate or accessorize ourselves.

It is same too.
>> It is the same as well. 

Doing tattoos is one of decorations that people do.
>> Having tattoos is an example on how people decorate themselves. 

Because of this reason, I think we can feel free about doing tattoos nowadays.
>> Because of this reason, I think we should feel free to decorate ourselves with tattoos. 

But actually, I don't like tattoos.
>> CORRECT
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