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What is your opinion about people with tattoos? Explain your answer.

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These days, tattoos are popular especially young people and women.
What We do tattoos at our not only bodies but also our eyelines and eyebrows becomes common.
Except those tigers and some letters, I think tattoos is good for our appearance.

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These days, tattoos are popular especially young people and women.
>> These days, tattoos are popular, especially to young people and women.

What We do tattoos at our not only bodies but also our eyelines and eyebrows becomes common.
>> We can do other tattoos nowadays already, like tattoo eyeliners and tattooed eyebrows. 

Except those tigers and some letters, I think tattoos is good for our appearance.
>>  I think tattoos are good for our appearance.
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