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ESSAY: Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

I also do not know well my neighbors . I can hardely meet them at elevators or aisle because I live in an apartment.
I heard the news that an old man was founded in death alone.
when police invested the case, the old man dead 3 month ago before he was founded.
His neighbors did not notice his death but they had a smell very bad.
What a tragedy!!
To be more close our neighbors,
we have to learn how we can share our time with others such like joinning the community group and monthly meeting.
therefore, we can make sure how each other are.

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Hi Ms. Eunice! In my country, neighbors know each other a lot. They even gossip about other people's lives. Hahaha! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I also do not know well my neighbors . 
>>> I also do not know my neighbors well
I can hardely meet them at elevators or aisle because I live in an apartment.
>>> I can hardly meet them on elevators or aisle because I live in an apartment.
I heard the news that an old man was founded in death alone.
>>> I heard the news that an old man was found dead alone.
when police invested the case, the old man dead 3 month ago before he was founded.
>>> When the police investigated the case, the old man died 3 months ago before he was found.
His neighbors did not notice his death but they had a smell very bad.
>>> His neighbors did not notice his death but they smelled something stinky.
What a tragedy!!
>>> CORRECT
To be more close our neighbors,
we have to learn how we can share our time with others such like joinning the community group and monthly meeting.
>>> To be closer to our neighbors,
we have to learn how we can share our time with others such as joining the community group and monthly meeting.

therefore, we can make sure how each other are.
>>> Therefore, we can make sure who our neighbors are. 
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