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Do you think robots or AI will replace human teachers in the future?

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Wow, that's an interesting question. I don't think those won't replace human teachers in 21 century. But those can do it in the far future. And I'd watched the many movies like I, Robot, Terminator, and many more. Looking at these, I think someday humans and robots will fight.

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Wow, that's an interesting question. 
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I don't think those won't replace human teachers in 21 century. 
>> I don't think those won't replace human teachers in the 21st century. 

But those can do it in the far future. 
>> But others can do it in the far future. 

And I'd watched the many movies like I, Robot, Terminator, and many more. 
>> And I've watched the many movies like I, Robot, Terminator, and many more. 

Looking at these, I think someday humans and robots will fight.
>> Watching these made me think that someday humans and robots will fight.

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