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What illness are you afraid of the most and why?

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Of couse, cancer is the most scared of the illnesses.
I don't want to imagine about that illnesses.

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Hi Gina! :) 

Me too! I am afraid of the illness as well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Of couse, cancer is the most scared of the illnesses.
>> I am scared of cancer the most. 

I don't want to imagine about that illnesses.
>> I don't want to imagine myself having that illness. 
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