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If you could choose another country to live in, where would it be and why? Answer in a few sentences

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Living in Seoul is one of my dreams because I do cafe tour and shopping often, and there are plenty of trendy cafes and shops that attracts me in this city.

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Hello, Judy!

It seems like there is no better country than yours because of Seoul City. Since you have been to other countries before, you can see how different South Korea is from them. Thus, enjoy your favorite places in Seoul, your enchanting city!

Thank you for this homework answer! I underlined the grammar suggestion I made. Moreover, I added 'too' at the second sentence suggestion. It's a long sentence with good construction and meaning. 

See you!

-T. Donna =)

Living in Seoul is one of my dreams because I do cafe tour and shopping often, and there are plenty of trendy cafes and shops that attracts me in this city.
>> Living in Seoul is one of my dreams because I do cafe tour and shopping often, and there are plenty of trendy cafes and shops that attract me in this city.
Or: Living in Seoul is one of my dreams because I do cafe tours and shopping often, and there are plenty of trendy cafes and shops that attract me in this city too.
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