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What illness are you afraid of the most and why?

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The illness that I am afraid of the most is AIDS.
As you know, If I get AIDS, then I just die and there isn't any treatment that can stop this illness.
Many people may know that you only infect this illness with sexual contact, but there is other ways.
If we use same toilet with a person who is having AIDS, then we could be infected.
Because of these reasons, I am afraid of AIDS the most among a lot of illnesses.

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Hi John! :) 

Me too! I am afraid of the illness as well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

The illness that I am afraid of the most is AIDS.
>> CORRECT

As you know, If I get AIDS, then I just die and there isn't any treatment that can stop this illness.
>> As you know, if a person gets AIDS, there will be no treatment and then they just die eventually. 

Many people may know that you only infect this illness with sexual contact, but there is other ways.
>> Many people may know that you can only get infected with this illness through sexual contact, but there are other ways.

If we use same toilet with a person who is having AIDS, then we could be infected.
>> If we use same toilet with a person who has AIDS, then we could be infected.

Because of these reasons, I am afraid of AIDS the most among a lot of illnesses.
>> CORRECT
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