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What illness are you afraid of the most and why?

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I'm such afraid of Alzheimer. Because my grandmother has it from father's side. It's okay which she got the illness, but I've been seeing that It can make family crazy around a person with Alzheimer. She asks them questions, She asks them questions, She talks about what she said, and again again again... So, I guess it's really scary to forget each of the things that she has lived.

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Hi Elic! :) 

That's horrible. I feel bad for her. I hope that she gets cured. :( 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I'm such afraid of Alzheimer. Because my grandmother has it from father's side. 
>> I am afraid of diseases such as Alzheimer because my grandmother from my father's side had it. 

It's okay which she got the illness, but I've been seeing that It can make family crazy around a person with Alzheimer. 
>> She's okay right now but I've been seeing a lot families being stressed having a person with Alzheimer around. 

She asks them questions, She asks them questions, She talks about what she said, and again again again...
>> She asks questions a lot and talks about the same thing again and again. 

So, I guess it's really scary to forget each of the things that she has lived
>>  So I guess it's really scary to forget about the things you've experienced in life. 
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