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What is one thing you have never done but would like to do?

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In my university, I wanted to go to Germany to learn German language and literature.

But, because of financial difficulties I couldn't accomplished my dream.

After graduation, I entered a trade company and worked about a year.

I moved a big department store. But I thought it's not my job.

Again, I moved an automobile magagine company, and have workrd about 15 year long.

After that, I set up my own company which is a internet automobile website, that is, Global Autonews.

Recently, my son went to the U.K. to study his major. It's a Geography & Environment. He is studing for his PhD.

I know it's impossible for me to study abroad right now.

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Hello Charley!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


In my university, I wanted to go to Germany to learn German language and literature.
>> When I was in the university, I wanted to go to Germany to learn German language and literature.
But, because of financial difficulties I couldn't accomplished my dream.
>> But because of financial difficulties, I couldn't accomplish my dream.
After graduation, I entered a trade company and worked about a year.
>> After graduation, I entered a trade company and worked for about a year.
I moved a big department store. But I thought it's not my job.
>> I moved to a big department store, but I thought, it's not the job that I want.
Again, I moved an automobile magagine company, and have workrd about 15 year long.
>> Again, I moved to an automobile magazine company and I have worked there for about 15 years.
After that, I set up my own company which is a internet automobile website, that is, Global Autonews.
>> After that, I set up my own company which is an internet automobile website, it's called Global Autonews.
Recently, my son went to the U.K. to study his major. 
>> Recently, my son went to the U.K. to study his major. 

It's a Geography & Environment. He is studing for his PhD.

>> His major is Geography & Environment and he is studying for his PhD.
I know it's impossible for me to study abroad right now.

>> CORRECT!

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