¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

If you can renovate something in your house, what would it be and why?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ½Å*¼·
2022-07-07 675

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

If I can do it, I want to make an attic room. Where the attic ceiling is made of glass and I can see the constellations. Plus, I want to make a dog house for DukGu which is our dog name at the yard. Last, I want to make a place where I can repair a car. Even if I'm a mechanic of airplane, I might repair a car. :)

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Elic!  

It sounds like an American home! That's good. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can do it, I want to make an attic room. 
>>If I can do it, I want to make a room in the attic where the ceiling is made of glass and I can see the constell

Where the attic ceiling is made of glass and I can see the constellations. 
>> Where the attic ceiling is made of glass and I can see the constellations. 

Plus, I want to make a dog house for DukGu which is our dog name at the yard. 
>> Plus, I want to make a dog house for DukGu, which is our dog, at the yard. 

Last, I want to make a place where I can repair a car. 
>> Last, I want to have a place where I can repair a car. 

Even if I'm a mechanic of airplane, I might repair a car. :)
>> Even if I'm a mechanic of airplanes, I might repair cars as well.  :)

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
123246 Voting is not a duty but... ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 0
123245 People sometimes say that \"laughter is the best medicine\".... ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 2522
123244 Should people have spectacular or simple engagements? Why? Share... ÀÌ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 2875
123243 Laughter is the best medicine. ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 2397
123242 get used to ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 1
123241 homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 1803
123240 homework! ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 3
123239 Explain one of the good movies you have seen. Why is it good? ¹Ú*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 2026
123238 What is your happy pill? ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 1676
123237 Free essay À±*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 6
123236 In which jobs do people have to make very quick decisions based... ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 2
123235 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 2
123234 feeling ±Ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 1855
123233 Many native English speakers do not learn to speak other... ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 1856
123232 Do you like to be busy, or do you like to have an easy schedule? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 2631
123231 Why do you have to ask permission from your parents when you... ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 0
123230 26.10.2022 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-27 3
123229 Which hobbies are the most popular with women in your country?... Àü*ä ¿Ï·á 2022-10-26 1236
123228 laugh ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-26 2132
123227 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-10-26 2332

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04