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If you can renovate something in your house, what would it be and why?

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If I can do it, I want to make an attic room. Where the attic ceiling is made of glass and I can see the constellations. Plus, I want to make a dog house for DukGu which is our dog name at the yard. Last, I want to make a place where I can repair a car. Even if I'm a mechanic of airplane, I might repair a car. :)

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Hi Elic!  

It sounds like an American home! That's good. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can do it, I want to make an attic room. 
>>If I can do it, I want to make a room in the attic where the ceiling is made of glass and I can see the constell

Where the attic ceiling is made of glass and I can see the constellations. 
>> Where the attic ceiling is made of glass and I can see the constellations. 

Plus, I want to make a dog house for DukGu which is our dog name at the yard. 
>> Plus, I want to make a dog house for DukGu, which is our dog, at the yard. 

Last, I want to make a place where I can repair a car. 
>> Last, I want to have a place where I can repair a car. 

Even if I'm a mechanic of airplane, I might repair a car. :)
>> Even if I'm a mechanic of airplanes, I might repair cars as well.  :)

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