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Is it always necessary for a married couple to have kids?

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Is it always necessary for a married couple to have kids?

I think that problem is varies form country to country. The country that have lots of people don¡¯t need to have kid essentially. Because they don¡¯t have to worry about decreasing people like China, and America. But the another countrys that birthrate is actually low should have more kids like South Korea. In South Korea, a broading cast stations advertise that they encourage married couple to have more kids for the future. I also agree with that advertisement. It is indeed important problem!

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Hi, Harry! :)
Thank you for diligently writing an essay regarding this matter. 
I agree that countries with a healthy number of population and a good balance of old and young people should practice birth control. 
On the other hand, countries with dwindling populations such as your country, Japan and other European countries should improve their birthrates because there are more old people than young people in your country these days and that's quite alarming. 
I hope your government finds a way to improve the population especially during this economic crisis. 
I hope you're having a great day. ^_^
See you in class later. 
~Teacher Charry

I think that problem is varies form country to country. 
>> I think that problem varies from country to country. 
The country that have lots of people don¡¯t need to have kid essentially. 
>> Countries with high populations should practice birth control. 
Because they don¡¯t have to worry about decreasing people like China, and America. 
>> It's because they don't have to worry about the the decreasing population like China and America. 
But the another countrys that birthrate is actually low should have more kids like South Korea. 
>> But in other countries with low birthrates like South Korea, the birthrate should be improved. 
In South Korea, a broading cast stations advertise that they encourage married couple to have more kids for the future. 
>> In South Korea, broadcasting stations advertise and encourage married couples to have more kids for the future. 
I also agree with that advertisement. 
>> CORRECT!
It is indeed important problem!
>> It is indeed an important problem!
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