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What is your daily routine?

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What is your daily routine?

I usally get up at 6 a.m .
Wash up, make up and leave the house.
In the moning go to the park and walk for 1 hour.

I bought a coffee and went to office about at 8 am.
At 3pm, I go to school pick up my daughter .
After taking my daughter to the academy, I come back my office. Again worked my job.

About 5 to 6 p.m I going home.
At 7:30p.m have a dinner.
I wash my daughter and watch her homework.

And than I drink beer and watch news,drama.
At 11 P.M go to bed.

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Hello, Soolyn! I couldn't thank you enough for writing the details of your daily routine. This is impressive! I would like like to encourage you to write consistently specifically 'a.m' and p.m'. If you start writing it that way, then use that format in the whole essay. Take care!-Faith-
What is your daily routine?
>> CORRECT
I usally get up at 6 a.m .
>> I usually get up at 6 a.m.
Wash up, make up and leave the house.
>> I wash up, do my make up and leave the house.
In the moning go to the park and walk for 1 hour.

>> In the morning, I go to the park and walk for one hour.
I bought a coffee and went to office about at 8 a.m.
>> Then, I buy a coffee and go to office at about 8 a.m.
At 3pm, I go to school pick up my daughter .
>> At 3 p.m, I go to school to pick up my daughter.
After taking my daughter to the academy, I come back my office. Again worked my job.

>> After taking my daughter to the academy, I come back to my office to continue my work.
About 5 to 6 p.m I going home.
>> I go home between 5 and 6pm.
At 7:30p.m have a dinner.
>> At 7:30 p.m, I have dinner.
I wash my daughter and watch her homework.

>> Next, I wash my daughter and check her homework.
And than I drink beer and watch news,drama.
>> Afterwards, I drink beer while watching news or dramas.
At 11 P.M go to bed.
>> Lastly, at 11 p.m, I go to bed.
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