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Do you think people make bad decisions because of peer pressure? Why or why not?

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2022-07-06 1058

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I think people often make bad decisions because of peer pressure. It is because, we usually have to make decisions quickly on we're life. In ordinary times, we don't make decisions everything. We just act naturally.
The situation we have to decide is coming suddenly or quickly.
Then, we feel peer pressure about decisions.
For example, When I ate with company crew. We choose the simply and same menu to eat quickly. So I have to eat meals what I don't like. That's become my bad decision.
It was very small matter but I feel pressure and stressful.
In fact, I think it need to feel peer pressure. It is because I'm not the only one person in the earth. We are live together. So we should consider peer. It could be convenient to live.
But also we need to make our decisions on myself. If you don't you will regret for your act. But you can not blame someone.
I'm not good at make decisions yet. It's so difficult things to me. But I will not regret for my decisions.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Eun Chae!
Wow!  Your answer is quite long to this question.  But remember to practice your corrections and improve yourself too. ^^

~T. Maine


I think people often make bad decisions because of peer pressure. 
>>Correct. 
It is because, we usually have to make decisions quickly on we're life. 
>>It is because we usually have to make decisions quickly in our lives. 
In ordinary times, we don't make decisions everything. 
>>In ordinary times, we don't make decisions about everything. 
We just act naturally.
>>Correct. 
The situation we have to decide is coming suddenly or quickly.
>>The situation makes us decide suddenly. 
Then, we feel peer pressure about decisions.
>>Then, we feel peer pressure for our decisions. 
For example, When I ate with company crew. We choose the simply and same menu to eat quickly. 
>>For example when I ate my meal with the company's crew, we chose the simple menu and ate quickly. 
So I have to eat meals what I don't like. 
>>So I had to eat my meal even if I don't like it. 
That's become my bad decision.
>>That became a very bad decision which I regret. 
It was very small matter but I feel pressure and stressful.
>>It was a very small matter but I felt pressure and stress. 
In fact, I think it need to feel peer pressure. 
>>In fact, I think it is needed to feel peer pressure. 
It is because I'm not the only one person in the earth.
>>It is because I'm not the only person on Earth. 
 We are live together. 
>>We are living with each other. 
So we should consider peer. 
>>So we should consider our peers. 
It could be convenient to live.
>>It could be more convenient to live with other people. 
But also we need to make our decisions on myself. 
>>But we also need to make our own decisions in life. 
If you don't you will regret for your act. 
>>If you don't, you will surely regret your actions. 
But you can not blame someone.
>>Correct. 
I'm not good at make decisions yet. 
>>I'm not good at making decisions. 
It's so difficult things to me. 
>>It's one of the most difficult things for me. 
But I will not regret for my decisions.
>>But I will not regret my decisions.  

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