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ESSAY: A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

I think the reason that a rise in the standard of living in a country benefit cities rather tham rural areas is because of the number of population.
Most of people want to live in the city to enjoy the infra of city therefore, It causes isolation of rural areas and reduce population.
To solve the problems, we have to invest and develop more to build a convienece enviroment in rural areas.
If let me do to solve, I will move White house and National Assebley to far areas from city at first.
As you know, there are many powerful and rich man in the goverment. If All of them move to countryside, the countryside is no longer countryside.

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Hi there Ms. Eunice thank you for answered your homework! Keep it up! Have a great day!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think the reason that a rise in the standard of living in a country benefit cities rather tham rural areas is because of the number of population. 
>>> I think the reason why there's a rise in the standard of living in a country which seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas is because of the number of population.
Most of people want to live in the city to enjoy the infra of city therefore, It causes isolation of rural areas and reduce population.
>>> Most people want to live in the city to enjoy its infra therefore, it causes the isolation of rural areas and reduce its population.
To solve the problems, we have to invest and develop more to build a convienece enviroment in rural areas.
>>> To solve the problem, we have to invest and develop more to build a more convenient environment in rural areas.
If let me do to solve, I will move White house and National Assebley to far areas from city at first.
>>> If l were to solve this problem, I will move the White house and National Assembly far from the city.
As you know, there are many powerful and rich man in the government.
>>> CORRECT
 If All of them move to countryside, the countryside is no longer countryside.
>>  Most of them moved to the countryside, so the countryside is no longer a rural area. 
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