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What is the cheapest yet valuable thing that you own?

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I think the cheapest one that I own is a program.
In a lot of online stores, we can easily buy some programs that we need for free.
We are able to buy those things if we have some digital gadgets and the internet access.
Because of this reason, I think the cheapest one that I own is a program.

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Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.\

I think the cheapest one that I own is a program.
>> CORRECT

In a lot of online stores, we can easily buy some programs that we need for free.
>> CORRECT

We are able to buy those things if we have some digital gadgets and the internet access.
>> We are able to buy those things if we have some digital gadgets and internet access.

Because of this reason, I think the cheapest one that I own is a program.
>> CORRECT

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