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Are video games good for relieving stress?

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From my perspective, playing video games have disadvantages more than advantages however, the effect driven by playing video games can not be ignored. Those who like to play video games can relieve stress. In my younger brother's case, he tends to release his stress by playing video games with his friends. It is for sure that video games help relieve stress.

On the other hand, we should notice that this help is limited to people who enjoy playing video games. Even those who love playing video games can be also harmed by video games because of addiction problems etc.

In conclusion, playing video games can release one¡¯s stress. However, it is a little bit difficult to conclude that playing video games are helpful to all people. Even for gamers, video games do not always give them pros.

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Happy Friday Helena!
I agree with your opinion on this matter, It really depends on how people receive the concept of video games. It can be beneficial to some, but can also cause disturbance to others.
T.Caitlyn
From my perspective, playing video games have disadvantages more than advantages however, the effect driven by playing video games can not be ignored.
 >>From my perspective, playing video games have more disadvantages than advantages however, the effect driven by playing video games can not be ignored.
Those who like to play video games can relieve stress. 
>> CORRECT
In my younger brother's case, he tends to release his stress by playing video games with his friends. 
>> CORRECT
It is for sure that video games help relieve stress.
>> >> CORRECT
On the other hand, we should notice that this help is limited to people who enjoy playing video games. 
>> On the other hand, we should notice that this effect is only limited to people who enjoy playing video games. 
Even those who love playing video games can be also harmed by video games because of addiction problems etc.
>> CORRECT
In conclusion, playing video games can release one¡¯s stress. 
>> CORRECT
However, it is a little bit difficult to conclude that playing video games are helpful to all people. 
>> CORRECT
Even for gamers, video games do not always give them pros.
>> CORRECT
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