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What is the cheapest yet valuable thing that you own?

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I think the cheapest yet valuable thing is a photo album. It was made by my parents. From my birth to childhood, boyhood, and youth, my parents took pictures and made it for me. And I'll wrap it up. Also I will show it with my wife in the future.

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Hi Elic!  

That sounds very precious. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think the cheapest yet valuable thing is a photo album. 
>> I think the cheapest yet valuable thing that I own is a photo album. 

It was made by my parents. 
>> CORRECT

From my birth to childhood, boyhood, and youth, my parents took pictures and made it for me. 
>> CORRECT

And I'll wrap it up. Also I will show it with my wife in the future.
>>I'll wrap it up and I will show it with my wife in the future.
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