무료 레벨테스트 받고 강사평가 남기면 1,OOO원 쿠폰 즉시 적립!

혹시 사이트에선 찾지 못한 궁금한 점이 있으세요?
남겨주신 이메일을 통해 답변 드리겠습니다.

문의하신 내용이 문자로 발송되오니
연락처를 남겨주세요.
업무시간 월~금 오전9시~오후6시
(점심시간 낮12시~오후1시)

영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

What is the most effective way to save endangered species?

작성자: 백*원
2022-06-30 671

회원님의 영작문

What is the most effective way to save endangered species?

I know one of the endangerd species. That is Sea Turtle. I think the reason why the endangered animals are increasing is because of rising the Earth’s temperature (it called Global Warming). These days, lots of facilitys and factorys are making harmful gases and CO2. They are making our air dirty and lead to global warming. Global warming makes animals habitat disappear and ruin the entire animals food chain. So what should we do for them? I think we have to get them and observe them continuously at safe place until their number of populations increase. Also we should not use some plastic or disposable things and advertising this plan. If we do like this plan, it may gonna be better than now.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good evening Harry! 
You're so hard-working. I am truly in awe! :)
I am glad to know that you're fully aware of the reason why the number of endangered species increase every single day. 
Not only that, you know exactly what to do to prevent them from getting extinct. 
Sadly, not everyone is as educated and knowledgeable as you. T_T
I wish people would stop discovering other planets and focus on saving this planet. Imagine what would happen if all countries in the world would spend money on planting trees instead of exploring the outer space. I bet those endangered animals will have a place to live in and won't have a disrupted food chain. 
I stopped using plastic a long time ago. I also try to repurpose all the plastic containers we have at home because I know that all those plastic waste that we use could possibly end up in the ocean. T_T
Anyhow, I hope you're having a great evening. 
What's for dinner, Harry? Eat well. ^^
See you again tomorrow. :)
~Teacher Charry

I know one of the endangerd species. 
>> I know one of the endangered species.
That is Sea Turtle. 
>> That is the sea turtle.
I think the reason why the endangered animals are increasing is because of rising the Earth’s temperature (it called Global Warming). 
>> I think the reason why the endangered animals are increasing is because of the Earth’s rising temperature which is called global warming. 
These days, lots of facilitys and factorys are making harmful gases and CO2. 
>> These days, lots of facilities and factories are emitting harmful gases such as CO2.
They are making our air dirty and lead to global warming. 
>> They are making our air dirty and cause global warming. 
Global warming makes animals habitat disappear and ruin the entire animals food chain.
>> Global warming makes animals' habitat disappear and ruin the entire animals' food chain.
So what should we do for them?
>> CORRECT!
I think we have to get them and observe them continuously at safe place until their number of populations increase. 
>> I think we have to get them and observe them continuously in a safe place until their populations increase. 
Also we should not use some plastic or disposable things and advertising this plan. 
>> Also, we should not use some plastics or disposable things and encourage other people to do it too. 
If we do like this plan, it may gonna be better than now.
>> If we follow this plan, things may be better than now. 
번호 제목 글쓴이 공개 상태 등록일 조회수
119597 What kind of leader is a good leader? 문*현 완료 2022-06-05 250
119596 How can I relieve stress. 김*성 완료 2022-06-04 99
119595 Why I like Doctor Strange 2. 김*성 완료 2022-06-04 72
119594 Why I want to visit America. 김*성 완료 2022-06-04 120
119593 Why I will not study aboard. 김*성 완료 2022-06-04 127
119592 Do you think that you should change your eating habits? 신*섭 완료 2022-06-04 250
119591 How do you get along with people who do not like you that much?... 이*연 완료 2022-06-04 258
119590 the reason why i am busy 이*미 완료 2022-06-04 216
119589 What should governments be doing about monkey pox? What might... 문*현 완료 2022-06-04 107
119588 What three things are most important for you in a job? Why? 문*현 완료 2022-06-04 122
119587 What do you think are the dangers of not using facemasks in... 문*현 완료 2022-06-04 89
119586 Do you think that you should change your eating habits? Why or... 이* 완료 2022-06-04 2
119585 6.3 전* 완료 2022-06-04 138
119584 What is the first thing you notice about a person? Why do you... 김*빈 완료 2022-06-04 290
119583 The character of the person I would like to date. 김*윤 완료 2022-06-03 95
119582 6/3 HOMEWORK 이*유 완료 2022-06-03 62
119581 Homework 김*연 완료 2022-06-03 111
119580 Homework 권*미 완료 2022-06-03 0
119579 Are you a patient person? Is it difficult or easy for you? Is it... 김*연 완료 2022-06-03 227
119578 Claire\'s Homework 박*연 완료 2022-06-03 117

HOW TO USE IT?

[마이페이지 > 수업 내용 보기 > 학습 캘린더 > 영작교정 버튼 클릭]

수업 횟수만큼 영작교정 게시판이 생성되며,
지난 날짜에도 게시 할 수 있습니다.

주5회 수업 : 월 20회 이용 가능
주3회 수업 : 월 12회 이용 가능
주2회 수업 : 월 08회 이용 가능
01
교정 내용은 최대 1,000byte까지 올릴 수 있습니다.

첨부 파일은 원활한 첨삭을 위한 참고자료로 사용될 뿐,
파일에 대한 첨삭은 불가능 합니다.

업로드 가능한 첨부 파일은 최대 2mb까지이며,
첨부 할 수 있는 파일 형식은 다음과 같습니다.

문서 - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
이미지 - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
전문 분야를 제외한 회원님이 직접 작성한 글만
첨삭이 가능하며,

올려주신 글의 강사님 첨삭은 24시간 이내에
완료 되는 것을 원칙으로 하고 있습니다.
03
하루 게시 가능한 글은 3회까지 이며,
종료된 수업의 영작교정 게시판은
이용이 어려운 점 양해 부탁 드립니다.
04

와이즈에듀케이션아이(주) 사이트명: 파워잉글리쉬 대표이사 전상현
사업자등록번호: 217-81-44736 통신판매신고번호: 2014-서울도봉-0233호
서울본사: 서울시 노원구 한글비석로 245 두타빌 B동 7층 713호
대표번호 1688-8672 개인정보관리 책임자: 안희영 [powerenglish@pweng.net]