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작성자: 김*우
2022-06-30 988

회원님의 영작문

Good afternoon, Donna.
I am happy to share my experiences about trip.
I have been to several cities in other countries.
They are Cancun in Maxico, Guam in USA, Bankok in Thailand, Cicago in USA, Danang in Vietnam, Osaka in Japan, and so on...
The most memorable place is Cancun.
That city has beautiful coasts and convenient hotel services.Furthermore I went there for my honeymoon.So I had a great time.
But, that place is so far from here, thus it took about 1 day to get there.It's too hard for me because I was a heavy smoker then. Now I quit the smoke fortunately.
Meanwhile there are many places to travel in Korea.
Jeju island is the most beautiful place in my country.Besides, It has various foods like fresh seafoods, delicious fishes such as Mackerel, Cutlassfish, noodle dishes with meat.
Seoul and Busan are big cities and they have good hotels that have convenient facilities, delicious foods, swimming pools.
I want to go Cebu island in your country someday.
Have a nice day.Thanks all~

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, good evening, Dr. Kim!

My apologies for reverting to your homework answer after several hours. I had to take my son to school and fetch him for a practice to receive an academic award next week. Anyway, reading your travel experience is so delightful. You have been to so many places and it seems that all of them left imprints of great memories, Cancun in particular. I have never been there but my brother went there for summer and it looked pretty cool on their photos. I assume you also rode on a yacht at the beach.

Aside from your travel overseas, you also shared Jeju Island and all of the activities and sumptuous food they have there. It's truly unique and I heard that going there lately costs a fortune. Anyway, you have written your homework in a very systematic way. Remember that in enumerating a series of similar kinds of nouns, you have to place the connector 'and' before the last kind. That is:  Mackerel, Cutlassfish, and noodle dishes with meat; convenient facilities, delicious foods, and swimming pools.

Excellent job!

Have a great night!

-T. Donna 

Good afternoon, Donna.
>> Correct!

I am happy to share my experiences about trip.
>> I am happy to share my experiences about some of my trips.

I have been to several cities in other countries.
>> Correct!

They are Cancun in Maxico, Guam in USA, Bankok in Thailand, Cicago in USA, Danang in Vietnam, Osaka in Japan, and so on...
>> Correct!
Or: Chicago in USA

The most memorable place is Cancun.
>> Correct!

That city has beautiful coasts and convenient hotel services.Furthermore I went there for my honeymoon.So I had a great time.
>> Correct!
Or: That city has beautiful coasts and convenient hotel services. Furthermore, I went there for my honeymoon so I had a great time.

But, that place is so far from here, thus it took about 1 day to get there.It's too hard for me because I was a heavy smoker then. 
>> Correct!

Now I quit the smoke fortunately.
>>  Now I quit smoking fortunately.

Meanwhile there are many places to travel in Korea.
>> Correct!

Jeju island is the most beautiful place in my country.Besides, It has various foods like fresh seafoods, delicious fishes such as Mackerel, Cutlassfish, noodle dishes with meat.
>>  Jeju island is the most beautiful place in my country. Besides, it has various foods like fresh seafoods, delicious fishes such as Mackerel, Cutlassfish, and noodle dishes with meat.

Seoul and Busan are big cities and they have good hotels that have convenient facilities, delicious foods, swimming pools.
>> Seoul and Busan are big cities and they have good hotels that have convenient facilities, delicious foods, and swimming pools.

I want to go Cebu island in your country someday.
>> I want to go to Cebu island in your country someday.

Have a nice day.Thanks all
>> Have a nice day.Thanks for all.
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