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Good morning again Donna!
I stayed up too late last night, so I don't have enough sleep.
I am so tired, but I am in the mood of delight and joy because I joined your English class in the morning.
My wife and I talked about Power English last night.
I told her the advantage of the class.
Thus she decided to join the class today.
I am so glad to hear that she enjoyed the first of the class with teacher Beth just before.
I wonder if you know her.
My wife actually tried to choose your class, but she couldn't do that because your class is already full.
Now, this is my homework.
I think the most Koreans are relatively healthy.
In my country many people know that balanced nutrition, regular exercise, keeping their body slim are important.
The richer, the healthier I think.
The most Korean have a good quality of life, and it's easy to obtain fresh vegetables, seasonal fruits, vitamins and somethings like that in Korea.
So I think Korea is a good country to live.
How about your country?

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Good afternoon, Dr. Kim!

I hope you are alert and awake as of this writing upon sleeping late last night with some discussions with your wife. It's great to hear about her first day and it is also very reassuring to know that you are satisfied with our teaching strategies and techniques. It's our pleasure to serve you! Regarding my class schedule, I hope to meet your wife in one way or another someday. My classes could get pretty busy sometimes. Teacher Beth and all of us always do our best to engage you in enjoyable and meaningful conversations.

Anyway, for the homework part, I realized that living in your country has a lot of advantages. There is more than enough opportunity for food, fitness, not to mention beauty in terms of  advanced medicine expecifically in your field of dermatology. In my country, the priviledged or the rich can access all of these conveniently. Meanwhile, a great number of Filipinos are still living in poverty and expereince malnutrition, diseases, and lack opportunities to better their lives. We have a long way to go to reach your level of independence in terms of financial security and nutrition.

Today, your writing was crystal clear with very limited room for suggestions to make. Carry on with your outstanding skills in writing!

See you again soon. Enjoy the rest of the day!

-T. Donna =)

Good morning again Donna!
>> Correct!

I stayed up too late last night, so I don't have enough sleep.
>> Correct!

I am so tired, but I am in the mood of delight and joy because I joined your English class in the morning.
>> Correct!

My wife and I talked about Power English last night.
>> Correct!

I told her the advantage of the class.
>> Correct!

Thus she decided to join the class today.
>> Correct!

I am so glad to hear that she enjoyed the first of the class with teacher Beth just before.
>> I am so glad to hear that she enjoyed her first class with teacher Beth.

I wonder if you know her.
>> Correct!

My wife actually tried to choose your class, but she couldn't do that because your class is already full.
>> Correct!

Now, this is my homework.
>> Correct!
 
I think the most Koreans are relatively healthy.
>> I think most Koreans are relatively healthy.

In my country many people know that balanced nutrition, regular exercise, keeping their body slim are important.
>> In my country many people know that balanced nutrition, regular exercise, and keeping their body slim are important.

The richer, the healthier I think.
>> Correct!

The most Korean have a good quality of life, and it's easy to obtain fresh vegetables, seasonal fruits, vitamins and somethings like that in Korea.
>> Most Koreans have a good quality of life, and it's easy to obtain fresh vegetables, seasonal fruits, vitamins and somethings like that in Korea.

So I think Korea is a good country to live.
>> Correct!

How about your country?
>> Correct!
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