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Hmm my neighborhood. Let me see¡¦ok here we go. First of all, I live in metropolitan of my city. So, my area is well modernized. And also, dynamic and bustling. Honestly, I don¡¯t like dynamic city. Well... most people love to live in the middle of the city. But in my opinion. The metropolitan of the city always noisy and busy. In addition, it has traffic jam too. but on the other hand, metropolitan of the city has comfortable public transportation and it has many cafés. So sometimes I feel confused and tired, but I love my place.

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Hello Robin!
Thanks for doing your homework.  Read and take note of your corrections and use them in your answer.  ^^

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Hmm my neighborhood. 
>>Well, let me talk about my neighborhood. 
Let me see¡¦ok here we go. 
>>Correct. 
First of all, I live in metropolitan of my city. 
>>First of all, I live in a metropolitan place. 
So, my area is well modernized. 
>>Correct. 
And also, dynamic and bustling. 
>>And it is also dynamic and bustling.
Honestly, I don¡¯t like dynamic city. 
>>Honestly, I don't like a dynamic city. 
Well... most people love to live in the middle of the city. 
>>Well, most people love to live in the middle of the city. 
But in my opinion. 
>>But in my opinion, 
The metropolitan of the city always noisy and busy. 
>>the metropolis is always noisy and busy. 
In addition, it has traffic jam too. 
>>In addition, it has traffic jams too. 
but on the other hand, metropolitan of the city has comfortable public transportation and it has many cafés. 
>>On the other hand, my neighborhood has comfortable public transportation and it has many cafes. 
So sometimes I feel confused and tired, but I love my place.
>>Correct. 
>>OR:  So there are times I feel confused and tired, but I like living in my place. 

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