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What is the scariest story that you know?

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If I mentioned this story, you won't be able to sleep. It's not what I heard, it's what I've actually been through. When I was a soldier... After night shift, I was going to sleep. Suddenly, my military colleague came in and sat down on my bed. I was trying to sleep, but he keep bothering me. So I told him to get out of here, He was quiet and told me I had money under my bed, and I looked at it, and at that moment, a hand-like figure was trying to pull me down. My head was dragged down to the floor and I could only move my eyes, but when I looked at my military colleague for help, he disappeared and I heard only his laughter.

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Hi Elic!  

It still gave me shivers even if I read it for the second time. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I mentioned this story, you won't be able to sleep. 
>> If I tell you this story, you won't be able to sleep. 

It's not what I heard, it's what I've actually been through. 
>> I didn't hear this from someone, I actually experienced it. 

When I was a soldier... 
>> It happened when I was still a soldier. 

After night shift, I was going to sleep. 
>> After the night shift, I was about to go to sleep. 

Suddenly, my military colleague came in and sat down on my bed. 
>>CORRECT

I was trying to sleep, but he keep bothering me. 
>> I was trying to sleep, but he kept bothering me. 

So I told him to get out of here, He was quiet and told me I had money under my bed, and I looked at it, and at that moment, a hand-like figure was trying to pull me down. 
>> So I told him to get out of here. He was quiet and told me I had money under my bed so I looked down. At that moment, a hand-like figure was trying to pull me down. 

My head was dragged down to the floor and I could only move my eyes, but when I looked at my military colleague for help, he disappeared and I heard only his laughter. 
>> CORRECT
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