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First of all, I am going to tell you about the proper management of laceration wound.
You'd better go to the hospital and get treatment, some medicines.
If you can't do that, make your wound clean with sterilized gauze and saline.
And Apply some antibacterial ointment slightly.
With medical band(or dressing), wrap the wound up.
Please avoid water and sweat and somethings like that until the wound is closed.
It will take about 3 days i think.
Okay, now i will do my homework.
I like many kinds of foods.
My favorite restaurant near my clinic is Chaofang.
It is a chinese restaurant.
I usually order japchae bab, composed of japchae and rice.
I also like tang soo yook(fried meat with sauce), jajang myeon(noodle with black sauce), chilly shrimp.
Those foods are delicious but too sweet, so I don't think those are good foods for my health.
My favorite restaurant near my home is Jiamsan-gol mak gook soo.
I fell for Mak gook soo in there.
I ate that food twice a week recently.
Have a nice day.

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Good day, Dr. Kim!

Thank you so much for your laceration wound professional advice which I cannot repay but I am most grateful about. When I cut it with a sharp fisherman's knife, I quickly washed the blood and raised my hand with a tight grip wrapped in a clean kitchen paper. Right after, I washed it twice with soap and wrapped it again with some clean tissue and waited for some minutes until it stopped bleeding profiously. At last, I cleaned it with some alcohol in a cotton ball. According to your advice, I shall keep it clean and dry for three days, so I must. Anyway, you explained the processes so well, great job! 

For your homework meanwhile, it is pretty evident on your writing how much you are into a wide variety of food. There is much to explore when it comes to food in your country. These food you listed below are best devoured in moderate amounts as you already know to stay fit yet still enjoy them.

Here are the strong points of your writing: 1.) 93 % accuray in grammar; 2.) simple to compex sentences with appropriate vocabulary; 3.) very good transition words; 4.) unique writing style and rich content.

With these, again, thank you for sending your homework answer punctually. Keep it up with the very good quality in your writing.

Catch you in class!

-T. Donna =)

First of all, I am going to tell you about the proper management of laceration wound.
>> Corect!

You'd better go to the hospital and get treatment, some medicines.
>> Correct!
Or: You'd better go to the hospital and get treatment or some medicines.

If you can't do that, make your wound clean with sterilized gauze and saline.
>> Correct!

And Apply some antibacterial ointment slightly.
>> Correct!
Or: Apply some antibacterial ointment slightly.

With medical band(or dressing), wrap the wound up.
>> Correct!

Please avoid water and sweat and somethings like that until the wound is closed.
>> Please avoid water, sweat, and somethings like that until the wound is closed.

It will take about 3 days i think.
>> Correct!
Or: It will take about 3 days I think.

Okay, now i will do my homework.
>> Correct!
Or: I 

I like many kinds of foods.
>> Correct!

My favorite restaurant near my clinic is Chaofang.
>> Correct!

It is a chinese restaurant.
>> Correct!

I usually order japchae bab, composed of japchae and rice.
>> Correct!

I also like tang soo yook(fried meat with sauce), jajang myeon(noodle with black sauce), chilly shrimp.
>> Correct!

Those foods are delicious but too sweet, so I don't think those are good foods for my health.
>> Correct!

My favorite restaurant near my home is Jiamsan-gol mak gook soo.
>> Correct!

I fell for Mak gook soo in there.
>> Correct!

I ate that food twice a week recently.
>> Correct!

Have a nice day.
>> Correct!
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