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First of all, thanks for teaching me today nonetheless I didn't tell you exactly if I could join the class.
Now I answer your request for today's homework.
There are many skin problems I've seen such as infection, dermatitis, trauma.
There are three groups of infections. (Bacteria, virus, fungus, etc...)(Could you tell me etc means and How I can read it?)
I get to the point of homework again. ^^
And there are many dermatitis such as contact dermatitis, urticaria, eczema, atopy, and so on.
And trauma include burn, abrasion, laceration, contusion....
Among them, the most common skin disease is a dermatitis of hand I think.
Hand dermatitis (so called hand eczema) usually result from contact of allergy or irritants.
It can be aggregated from some bad habits and life style.
So, I always say to that patients. " No alcohol, No exercise, Having Enough sleep, Avoidance of excessive contact to water and sweat."
Hand dermatitis is too hard to cure perfectly.
Nontheless we should try to treat.

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Hi, Dr. KIm! I hope that you had a blast this weekend.

Apologies for the late feedback to your homework. Anyway, thanks as well for squeezing in speaking English during your short vacation. You were very diligent on your first week of class and that is highly commendable. 

Before I comment on your homework answer, I would like to tell you the meaning of 'etc.' which is the abbreviation for the 'etcetera' that is used at the end of a list to  show similar items or kids of are included. Some other expressions you used below like 'so on' or 'among others' also mean similar to 'etc. or etcetera'.

Then, I Googled hand dermatitis and I have seen some rare cases of my classmates from my elementary days. Even so, I still played with them. ^^ Well, thank you for the extensive explanation and very clear flow of ideas presented on your homework answer. Your discussion could actually pass for a short Power Point Presentation. Wonderful job!

I shall see you in class soon. Good evening.

-T. Donna =)

First of all, thanks for teaching me today nonetheless I didn't tell you exactly if I could join the class.
>> Correct!
Or: First of all, thanks for teaching me today even though I didn't tell you exactly if I could join the class.

Now I answer your request for today's homework.
>> Now I  will answer your request for today's homework.

There are many skin problems I've seen such as infection, dermatitis, trauma.
>> There are many skin problems I've seen such as infection, dermatitis, and trauma.

There are three groups of infections. (Bacteria, virus, fungus, etc...)
>> Correct!
Or: There are three groups of infections and they are bacteria, virus, fungus, etc.

(Could you tell me etc means and How I can read it?)
>> (Could you tell me what etc. means and how I can read it?)

I get to the point of homework again. ^^
>> Correct!
Or: I will get to the point of the homework again.

And there are many dermatitis such as contact dermatitis, urticaria, eczema, atopy, and so on.
>> Correct!

And trauma include burn, abrasion, laceration, contusion....
>> Correct!
Or: Here, trauma include burn, abrasion, laceration, contusion....

Among them, the most common skin disease is a dermatitis of hand I think.
>> Correct!

Hand dermatitis (so called hand eczema) usually result from contact of allergy or irritants.
>> Hand dermatitis (so called hand eczema) usually results from contact of allergy or irritants.
Or: Hand dermatitis or the so called hand eczema usually results from contact with allergy or irritants.

It can be aggregated from some bad habits and life style.
>> Correct!

So, I always say to that patients. " No alcohol, No exercise, Having Enough sleep, Avoidance of excessive contact to water and sweat."
>> So, I always say to the patients, "No alcohol, no exercise, having enough sleep,  and avoidance excessive contact to water and sweat."

Hand dermatitis is too hard to cure perfectly.
>> Correct!

Nontheless we should try to treat.
>> Nonetheless we should try to treat it.

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