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Oh, It's an interesting question. I can describe myself who is passionate to learn whatever I want to. And I'm the one who makes it happen, no matter how long it takes. But I don't know answering this question. :)

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Hi Elic!  

This is actually a very positive personality of yours. Keep it up! You'll find yourself achieving all of your goals soon. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Oh, It's an interesting question. 
>> Oh, that's an interesting questions. 

I can describe myself who is passionate to learn whatever I want to. 
>> I can describe myself as a passionate learner that does whatever he wants to do. 

And I'm the one who makes it happen, no matter how long it takes. 
>> I usually make things happen no matter how long it takes. 

But I don't know answering this question. :)
>> But I don't know how to answer this question. 
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