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What do you think is the best country in the world and why?

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I think Canada is the best country in the world.
Frankly I don't know each world well.
With my short knowledge, If someone immgrates to Canada.
When some mothers sign up for the university or the collage, their kids can take classes in public school for free.
This policy can lead up many immigrants to come to Canada.
Then many working people can pay taxes to their country.
Therefore both Canadians and immigants are good for life.
So I think Canada is good country.

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Hi Gina!  

I would love to live in that country as well. They are well disciplined and the economy is good there. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think Canada is the best country in the world.
>> CORRECT

Frankly I don't know each world well.
>> Frankly I don't know each countries very well. 

With my short knowledge, If someone immgrates to Canada.
>> With my short knowledge, some people migrate to Canada. 

When some mothers sign up for the university or the collage, their kids can take classes in public school for free.
>> When mothers sign up for the university or the collage of their kids, they usually pick the public ones so that it's free. 

This policy can lead up many immigrants to come to Canada.
>> CORRECT

Then many working people can pay taxes to their country.
>> Many working people pay taxes to their country. 

Therefore both Canadians and immigants are good for life.
>> Therefore, both Canadians and immigrants are good for life.

So I think Canada is good country.
>> CORRECT
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