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What do you think is the best country in the world and why?

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I think the best country is Sweden. It's because that country's welfare is the best in the world. But I have to pay half of my salary in taxes. So far, I guess it's a good thing. Because I can't receive the national pension from my generation. The main reason that Korea is aging now and the birth rate is decreasing.

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Hi Elic!  

I would love to live in that country as well. They are well disciplined. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think the best country is Sweden. 
>> CORRECT

It's because that country's welfare is the best in the world. 
>> CORRECT

But I have to pay half of my salary in taxes. 
>> If I live there, I have to pay half of my salary in taxes. 

So far, I guess it's a good thing. 
>> CORRECT

Because I can't receive the national pension from my generation. 
>> It's because here in South Korea, I can't receive the national pension from my generation. 

The main reason that Korea is aging now and the birth rate is decreasing.
>> The main reason that South Koreas populations is decreasing and the birth rate is decreasing. 

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