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Good afternoon, T. donna.

I am so glad that you taught me well.

Thank you everyday.

About homework..

I am sorry for my late homework today.

I was so busy doing my routine jobs all day. (Patient care, contacting trading companies, paperwork...)

Now here is my homework.

I don't like to work on Sundays or holidays.

If my patients have any urgent problem, they can inform us through online.

In that case, our team chief check first and she will call me about it if necessary.

Many years ago, there were a problem with filler procedure in my patient.

At that time, I went to the clinic and saw the patient and solved the problem.

Except that, I never worked on Sundays.

I love my freedom on my off day.

Of course, sometimes I need to do some paperwork on Sundays.

For me, paper is easier than people. ^^

I don\'t think that is a big deal.

Is that answer enough?

See you tomorrow morning!!

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

You are welcome! It's my duty and responsibility to teach you well. It's my pleasure. Anyway, homework is submitted within 24 hours, thus there is no problem about your submission. It was on time. 

I see how you value your day off on Sundays because it is what we ought to do. We are human beings who feel exhausted with work routines along with the other mundane moments of the weekdays. However, we have our preofessions to serve and need to execute. Thus, having some 'me-time' is deemed necessary. You deserve it, unless during emergency cases.

Nonetheless, I am grateful for the time and effort you devoted to write down your homework in spite of your patient care, contacting trading companies, paperwork, among others. It was very well made, wonderful job!

I will see you then. 

-T. Donna =)

I am so glad that you taught me well.
>> Correct!

Thank you everyday.
>> Correct!

About homework..
>> About the homework.

I am sorry for my late homework today.
>> Correct!

I was so busy doing my routine jobs all day. (Patient care, contacting trading companies, paperwork...)
>> Correct!

Now here is my homework.
>> Correct!

I don't like to work on Sundays or holidays.
>> Correct!

If my patients have any urgent problem, they can inform us through online.
>> Correct!
Or: If my patients have any urgent problem, they can inform us online. 

In that case, our team chief check first and she will call me about it if necessary.
>> Correct!

Many years ago, there were a problem with filler procedure in my patient.
>>  Many years ago, there was a problem with the filler procedure of my patient.

At that time, I went to the clinic and saw the patient and solved the problem.
>> Correct!

Except that, I never worked on Sundays.
>> Correct!
Or: Aside from that, I never worked on Sundays.

I love my freedom on my off day.
>> Correct!
Or: I love my freedom on my day off.

Of course, sometimes I need to do some paperwork on Sundays.
>> Correct!

For me, paper is easier than people. ^^
>> Correct!

I don\'t think that is a big deal.
>> Correct!

Is that answer enough?
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow morning!!
>> Correct!
Or: See you tomorrow morning!
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